>>1120266
I wasn't blaming the artist for the OC, I know the design is the commissioner's fault. I did say this comic was wasted potential and that other than the hideous OC, the comic looks good. But in all honesty, the artist did draw him really ugly-looking.
Also, as it turns out, I saved the little alternate story I wrote since I thought it was pretty hot. I even made it fit into the number of pages this comic has so it really shows how much potential was wasted because the commissioner couldn't keep his crap out of it.
"Here's a different plot that would have been SO much better:
Pages 1-3 remain the same.
Page 4, panel 1 stays the same as well, but Moby is shown to be awake and surprised at the others being there and is in a better bondage harness with his cock and balls exposed. The rest of page 4 has Moby humiliated at being seen like this, demanding to know what they're doing there and crying out to the others to not look at him while he's like that.
Pages 5-6: they get him down and untie his hands. He remains in the outfit, but covers his crotch. The others stare at him in shock and ask what happened. Moby confesses that he's gay/bi, really into bondage, and is a sub. He went out for a few days to get it on with some bondage masters who were into doing it with a humanoid shark. The other sharks thought he was missing because they conveniently missed the note Moby left that said he would be out for a few days or for some other reason. The bondage masters end up being no-shows today for some unknown reason.
Page 7: The other sharks feel dumb for missing Moby's message and are sorry for catching him acting out his fetish and humiliating him. Moby is ashamed and thinks they're disgusted. The others say they're his brothers and don't give a damn and they accept him. Some of the sharks will be shown to have slight tents in their pants (they aren't focused on, it's just a small detail), giving a subtle hint that they are attracted to Moby and are aroused at his outfit. Moby looks less upset and says "you mean it?" or something similar, but still looks unsure that the others mean it.
Page 8: One of the others says "of course" and, doing some quick thinking, suggests that they all try on bondage gear as well to make Moby feel more comfortable since he won't be alone. Of course, that's only part of his motive. The shark that makes that suggestion really wants to see everyone in the gear. Since everyone else is aroused by Moby, they agree to the idea. Moby says something like "you guys sure you wanna do that? You'll all basically be naked." They all agree again and Moby brings out several pieces of bondage gear, saying they were all supposed to be for him and the no-show bondage masters, with him switching between multiple harnesses.
Page 9: All of the sharks are shown putting on the gear, one panel shows Moby helping another fit his cock and balls through a large cock ring of one of the harnesses while blushing.
Pages 10-11: 2-page spread cut in three panels. First panel is the top half of the page and shows all the sharks in the gear, some of them comment on their own sexiness. Bottom half is the next two panels. The second panel shows some cocks getting rock-hard. Third panel has Moby's eyes widen as he stares that all of them getting hard. He then asks "what's going on?"
Page 12: the shark that suggested trying on the gear grabs Moby's also-hard cock and presses close against him, saying that he was just turned on at seeing Moby like that and wanted an excuse to get everyone naked and into bondage gear. He also notes that Moby seems to like seeing everyone that way as well. Some of the other sharks chuckle and agree, one saying he's glad he's not the only one who was thinking that. The shark molesting Moby then kisses him, catching him by surprise as the other sharks move in and grope him. Moby then protests "B-but we're brothers!" And another shark counters "and we're all sexy as hell, so why should that get in the way" final panel has Moby close his eyes, giving in to what's going on, muttering about how good it feels.
Pages 13-18: 6 pages of steamy hot sharkcest. Moby is most often shown taking a dick or several. One page has two in his ass and one in his mouth. Everyone gets progressively sweatier and cum-stained. By the end, Moby's asshole is heavily cum-stained, his mouth has a couple of cum drips, and he has bits of cum all over his body. Everyone else is the same, but less so and their cocks are coated with cum.
Page 19: the sharks are cuddling together in the afterglow of their final orgasm either all together or in pairs, each giving comments on how great it was, how much they're gonna all have sex from now on, etc.
Page 20: small narration box states how much time passes and how at their home/base, the sharks now always go nude or wear some bondage gear whenever they're alone. The panels show the sharks exchanging some banter, some discussing their dad, and one of them fucking Moby. They're all either fully nude or wearing a bondage harness. Moby's fully decked out in gear: a full-body harness, a collar, a leash, and wrist and ankle cuffs. The narration states that they all have sex on a regular basis, one-on-one or in groups. Moby is almost always (or always) the submissive partner, but he loves it. Then it sarcastically gives a cheesy line about how they're closer together now.
THE END."
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