Um.. pardon me but...
First off, I'm thankful for all of you who've done the splendid job of translating and editing this doujin.
However, I would say, some of the lettering could be fixed and organized. The text can be centered instead of aligned right, and the fonts can be made consistent and not change between characters.
Some of the dialogues can be edited too.
More importantly, I believe the dragon captain's name is supposed to be "Vald"?
I'm not sure about the crocodile's name, it could either be "Gale" or "Geil"
If you want, I can edit the doujin again. What do you guys think?
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