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>sees this VN.
>"heh...this is hilarious..."
>"huh?"
>*squint eyes*
>" we are a team of developers furry visual novel based in Indonesia"
>AAAAAAAAAA
as a fellow indonesian, lemme give you a few words.
dude if you're gonna make a vn, tone down the weaboo shit a little.just with the story set in japan it already set off this anime feel into it.we don't like that in here.we do love japanese furry aka kemono design, but if you draw your character with such a tacky feature, nobody wants it.it's cringy from the first look.this might be only my taste, but don't give furries hair style.if you still want to give them one for the sake of variety, use a normal one.
as it seemed that you can't draw a background, just use stock photos or get a photo of one online and blur it on photoshop.
no japanese has haruto as a name. (unless if this is gonna be a fantasy story, then i'll give you a pass on that.ludicrousness match well with this genre.)
i can't say anything about the story cause i haven't read it (and maybe never will), but i hope it's not full of otaku culture in it, so don't do that.
i'm just saying.if you want to advertise it here, we have things usually shunned like mentioned above.
from the surface it looks bad.what really make a good novel is its story and its grammar.lemme correct that sentence you displayed that says "i just want know what's your name?".
it could be corrected into "i just want TO know,(with a comma) what's your name?" or "i just want to know what your name is".(who am i to judge.i make grammar error all the time.you might find one on this long rant.)
but since this is a VISUAL novel, graphic holds an importance too in here.so you gotta work it out for both the grammar and art.but i guess you guys did your best on them both.last thing that can save you is the story.you must write a story good enough to distract us from the things this VN offer.
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